To Simile or Not to Simile

The first draft of AWESOME SAUCE contained not one simile. I knew similes were important to writing. Comparing two unlike things can bring a reader into the mind of the narrator and establish fresh visuals to the scene. But how many is too many?

After completing what was essentially the final story I went to work creating similes. My efforts produced a simile factory churning out a new one on almost every other page. You didn’t have to go far before reading another entertaining comparison of some person or object to something else. I realized that too many is not a good thing and eventually the editing axe cut down the simile parade. Here though are a few of my favorites left in the final version:

Sitting down I look up to see Mom staring at me like an incomplete science project.

It’s Everly and she looks like a cobra ready to strike.

Homework is like a merry-go-round and I can’t get off.

My mind is sizzling like bacon in a hot pan.

The explosion erupts sounding like an elephant with a bad cold.

My walk must look like a puppet without strings.

The time displayed hits me like a fall to the ground.

Her tongue is like a wet rag on my hand

Jonson studies the area like an eagle.

People think I am a hard one to figure out and Billy is like a 2500 piece 3D puzzle.

About Greg Pattridge

Climbing another mountain...writing middle grade novels.
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