The first draft of AWESOME SAUCE contained not one simile. I knew similes were important to writing. Comparing two unlike things can bring a reader into the mind of the narrator and establish fresh visuals to the scene. But how many is too many?
After completing what was essentially the final story I went to work creating similes. My efforts produced a simile factory churning out a new one on almost every other page. You didn’t have to go far before reading another entertaining comparison of some person or object to something else. I realized that too many is not a good thing and eventually the editing axe cut down the simile parade. Here though are a few of my favorites left in the final version:
Sitting down I look up to see Mom staring at me like an incomplete science project.
It’s Everly and she looks like a cobra ready to strike.
Homework is like a merry-go-round and I can’t get off.
My mind is sizzling like bacon in a hot pan.
The explosion erupts sounding like an elephant with a bad cold.
My walk must look like a puppet without strings.
The time displayed hits me like a fall to the ground.
Her tongue is like a wet rag on my hand
Jonson studies the area like an eagle.
People think I am a hard one to figure out and Billy is like a 2500 piece 3D puzzle.